an essay about fashion piracy

 Hi, I need your help again:D

In an essay of 700 – 1,000 words, explain the controversy over 

design piracy in the fashion industry, and give your opinion on 

the issue. Base on the TEDx video and two attached passages.

fashion piracy paradox.docx 

Before Models can Turn Around.docx 

http://www.ted.com/talks/johanna_blakley_lessons_from_fashion_s_free_culture.html

It is due on Wednesday 11am.  September 18. More time for you this time lol.

Hers’s the Goals of the assignment:

-An effective thesis statement (that passes the ‘so what’ test)

-Coherence

a. Logical order

b. Follow your theme and CI

c. Consistency of person and number

– MLA

– Integration of class materials

– Improvement on specified language points

PS: I love your last essay, you’ ve done great job, but here are some problems. Please pay attention to the logic and the organization of the whole passage and use more transition sentences, break the paragraphs and paraphrase the sentences from the given materials.

Thanks a lot and I really appreciate it.

Best